Sentence 1: the titanic, believed to be unsinkable, carried more then 1,500 people to there graves.
Corrected: The titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.
Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Corrected: Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary that we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem, The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Corrected: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Corrected: "I am very eager to read the French novel The Plague," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library,"
DOL 27
Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Corrected: Everyone in this grade is responsible for thsi year's dance, therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations.
Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Corrected: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Corrected: I reme
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
DOL 33
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Corrected: When are these books due, Hans? Should I bring them to the library?
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
Corrected: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Correction: Much depends on the weather; you are affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.
Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Correction: While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Corrected: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because no one had a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Corrected: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Corrected: "There are some athletes who rarely but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal stated.
Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Corrected:The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
DOL 38
Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
Corrected: The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
Corrected: We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because so many actors caught the flu.
DOL 39
Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Corrected: To be allowed to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mom fix dinner.
Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Corrected: Mr. Corazzini who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Corrected: Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin from Atlanta.
Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Corrected: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.
DOL 41
Sentence 1: park rangers which work in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth
Corrected: Park rangers, who work in large factories, periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth.
Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
Corrected: After the discovery of penicillia, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have passed and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.
DOL 42
Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
Corrected: Differences among the eight camp counselors, caused a change in the field trip's destination.
Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests
Corrected: First, Felicia planned the party; second, decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests
DOL 43
Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found
DOL 25
Sentence 1: the titanic, believed to be unsinkable, carried more then 1,500 people to there graves.
Corrected: The titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.
Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Corrected: Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary that we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem, The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Corrected: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Corrected: "I am very eager to read the French novel The Plague," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library,"
DOL 27
Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Corrected: Everyone in this grade is responsible for thsi year's dance, therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations.
Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Corrected: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Corrected: I reme
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
DOL 33
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Corrected: When are these books due, Hans? Should I bring them to the library?
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
Corrected: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Correction: Much depends on the weather; you are affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.
Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Correction: While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Corrected: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because no one had a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Corrected: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Corrected: "There are some athletes who rarely but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal stated.
Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Corrected:The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
DOL 38
Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
Corrected: The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
Corrected: We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because so many actors caught the flu.
DOL 39
Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Corrected: To be allowed to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mom fix dinner.
Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Corrected: Mr. Corazzini who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Corrected: Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin from Atlanta.
Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Corrected: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.
DOL 41
Sentence 1: park rangers which work in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth
Corrected: Park rangers, who work in large factories, periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth.
Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
Corrected: After the discovery of penicillia, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have passed and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.
DOL 42
Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
Corrected: Differences among the eight camp counselors, caused a change in the field trip's destination.
Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests
Corrected: First, Felicia planned the party; second, decided on decorations; third, she invited special guests
DOL 43
Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found